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Wednesday, February 17, 2010

Dad,I love you forever.

What do you feel today?Lingering absence of loss,
Do you still feel the cold, left out feeling,?
Is this how you allow yourself to feel about dad!

Though we miss their presence every day.

Today is indisputably not much different
Thoughts of his last breath comes often
But again detour them from mind
Never understood why devotion had to leave!

Walk around as if melancholy never exists,
Am I looming over stifled bouts of sadness!
The void never fulfill, no matter what!
No reasons ever enough to console minds.

It’s hypocritical to be moaning around
Thoughts never leap forward on other days
Aren’t they part of your every day routine?
Feel them alongside each day, unconditionally.

Each tear we shed reach them like streams,
Making them anxious to run back to us,
Impossible but hearts runs through the wind,
Reassuring with a touch, oblivious to many.

Reality still remains the same, harsh, unrelenting,
Life reassures, relative comforts, friend’s supports,
Yet vacuum remains same, big enough to engulf,
Undying wind of love, remains strong as ever.



I like these lines most:
Each tear we shed reach them like streams,
Making them anxious to run back to us,

Here the poetess has revealed the passion of love and parting (sadness) within one breath. The narrative technique is so beautiful and the word so lucid that while reading the poem, one would feel hearing the murmur of water of stream flowing from the high mountain.

Sapna Anu B.George said...

Thnaks a lot Naval, those words speaks a volums, i do not have to ask for a review to anyone now, but YOU.

The Intrepid Journeyman said...

The penultimate verse summarise the whole poem...pregnant with so much passion and emotion...I read the verse over and over again...Also the verse begins with "Walk around..", I can relate to the poem very much! I lost my dad 12 years ago and I am still unable to find closure. You have pretty much said it right, but still it didn't stop the tears that has been flowing for the last 12 years...A very calming and reassuring poem Sapna and the eloquence and fluidity with which you write is indeed commendable!!!

Sapna Anu B.George said...

As usual,overseed my poem with your comments and thanks again,for such wonderful responce.